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  1. Hello Jana,
    I love your idea for your storybook! After reading your introduction I instantly wanted to read more, but then I noticed that you have not yet posted the next story. The one thing that i really love about your theme is that it almost sounds like a TV sitcom. Following a young actress achieve her dream in a big production of the Indian Epics is something I never would have thought of but know that you have published it as a story I can not wait to read more.
    Also I noticed one small grammatical detail and that is the sentence "My parents raised my siblings and I..." I believe that this should actually say "My parents raise me and and my siblings..." I used to struggle a lot with that phrase but I have learned that it is easy to get it right by checking if it would make sense without the additional thing, (i.e. "Siblings"). I hope that helped and I can't wait to read more!

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  2. Hello Jana! I am here from your project website. I also read Tiny Tales from the Ramayana. I went back to the original to get a better understanding of the changes you made. I have to say that this was a very fun read. The details that you included gave the story a bit more depth which was certainly engaging for me as the reader. One thing I would mention is that the story doesn't exactly have a title. It just says "Part 1". Now if you planned to continue the same story this certainly makes sense. If not, I would recommend giving it a unique name. Either way the story was an exciting read. As for your website itself, I like it a lot! It is very visually appealing. I like how yo have different pictures for each of the tabs which is neat. Not only does it look good but it is also easy to navigate from page and page and find exactly what I'm looking for. Great job! Looking forward to reading more from you!

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  3. Hi Jana. I just read your introduction and first story, and I thought it was really good. What I really liked about it is that it seems like it parallels the love story between Sita and Rama. Except this time it seems like it is from the point of Sita which I really like, because in the Ramayana we sometimes do not get a lot of Sita's perspective. Shifting to the focuses of the way the story was told, I think you did a really good job. For example, I thought the dialog between the characters was really good. I also thought you did a good job of getting Anika's perspective as she talked to Anil. And you also did a good job showing Anika's excitement when she was selected to play Sita in the play. Overall, you did a really good job introducing and telling your first story, and I cannot wait to read the rest of the story and see how it turns out for Anika.

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  4. Hey Jana,
    I loved the layout of your website. It is so aesthetically pleasing! Also you did a great job choosing the name for this blog as it was the first thing that got me intrigued. I also enjoyed your writing style, it made me feel at home. It is like a blog I would actually read in my free time for fun. Your introduction was PERFECT! It made me curious about Anika's life and I wanted to read more. The whole idea of you revolving this storybook around Anika is also very cool. The first meeting of Anil and Anika seemed just out of a movie. I could imagine it and the pace was just right! I am curious what were other people's reaction to Anika and Anil dating? Did the director think it was a good idea? I am cheering for the couple! I am also curious if Ravana is going to be the other protagonist. I usually find myself cheering for "other guy." Is he going to be charming and sweep Anika off of her feet? Or is he more of a villain-y character? I am pretty eager to read what will happen next!

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